Round 2 of the 2020 Smut Marathon has now closed. Below you’ll find a few details and insights about that round’s assignment as well as dates for the next round.
The Smut Marathon has moved onward with Round 3. So, it is now safe to share a bit about the second writing assignment as well as some background into the entry I submitted.
Read on to see what I wrote and how I fared for Round 2…or click the link(s) below to read my entries for past rounds.
►► Previous entries: Round 1 | Round 2 | Round 3
Round 2 Assignment – Borrowing a Sentence
For the second round of the Smut Marathon, writers were asked to draft an erotic story comprised of 100 to 125 words, but which also included one sentence from the previous round—an entry written by another Smut Marathoner.
My entry for this round was listed as #39 during voting and is shown below:
39) Predator and Prey
Despite your firm grasp around my throat, I shake as your rough thrusts impale me. I’m sure you mistake my growing tremors for resistance—predators often do. However, my endless appetite for male flesh isn’t characteristic of prey.
Your pre-cum coats my tongue from moments before, giving me a contact high that intensifies the twitching in earnest. You grunt as my pussy tightens, convulsing around yet another erection in faded denim behind a seedy, backwoods bar.
Avoiding your gaze, I feel your breath graze my lips with an unspoken, hunted hunger* that ignites my own. When you come, I reveal gleaming eyes and an unhinged jaw before pouncing with such voracity that your hindbrain doesn’t process the threat…only that certain death has come.
*Blue text = Borrowed sentence from Johnny Jackhammer’s (36) Discreet Dancing
My Thought Process
The way I approached this assignment was to randomly pick out 5 or 6 sentences from Round 1 that were fairly generic, but that also didn’t show overuse of alliteration (considering I preferred not to use those that resembled tongue-twisters).
Of the few sentences I singled out, I narrowed down the choices to those that I could add to or manipulate without changing the original sentence. The sentence written by Johnny Jackhammer’s (36) ‘Discreet Dancing’, lent itself well for that purpose. Then I set about thinking how I could change the ‘tone’ of the sentence.
I opted to go with a darker, horror-like form of eroticism for my entry this round for a few reasons. First, I was inspired by the ‘hunted hunger’ implicit in the borrowed sentence I chose. Second, I was counting on the fact that there wouldn’t be a lot of writers who would elect to pen lines that fit within the fantasy/horror genre. So, I’d have a better chance of having a memorable story that would stand out amidst the other 86 entries. Finally, in choosing the sentence I did, I could take advantage of the 1st-person/2nd-person POV, which lent itself well to the kind of visceral story I wanted to write.
In the end, I settled on the story idea that gave the impression that the main character was the ‘prey’ in an aggressive sexual interaction with a predator. Then gradually revealed that it was she who was, in fact the predator in the scenario. I added a few words onto the end of the borrowed sentence to serve as a foil to the ‘hunted/hungry’ feelings my main character would also feel as she transformed from presumed prey to predator.
Getting Mixed Reviews…Again
This round, I managed to score 6 more points overall—earning 5 points from the public vote and 1 point from the jury. I was happy to see my entry got 9 actual votes from the public this time, which improved my overall ranking and moved me up from the 21st position to 18th in the overall standings.
Still, I think it’s safe to say that there were those who were not fans of my combining horror within my erotic tale. A few readers who didn’t enjoy the horror direction my entry took said:
“For me, there’s a bit too roughness and it almost feels like horror, especially with the ending, which is great, but didn’t suit my taste for this round.”
” I find it hard to be turned on by fantasies that involve blood and death!”
However, there were also those who were more favorable of my decisions to mix things up a bit. Here are a few positive comments my entry received:
“Very interesting! I love how you twisted this sentence into a horror micro story!”
“This is a full story, well written from beginning to end.”
“…I get the distinct sense of something supernatural at play here. And I like the idea of the prey being the predator. I’m iffy on the 2nd person narrator…it does create a more active and feeling of audience involvement.”
As is always the case, voting really boiled down to each individual reader’s taste in erotica. Still, I had a lot more fun writing a story that went against the grain than with it. So, no regrets.
General Overview of the Field
Overall, I thought most entries effectively integrated their chosen borrowed sentences into their erotic micro stories. However, there were a lot of entries that, in my opinion, didn’t really create complete stories. Instead, many wrote erotic scenes that didn’t include a beginning, middle, and an end. Still, in most cases, the writing was very erotic otherwise.
A few things I did note, stories that used some of the more popular sentences from Round 1 ended up sounding very similar. As a result, some of those stories didn’t stand apart enough amidst the other entries, and therefore didn’t make my short-list of favorites.
Another commonality I found was that many of the entries that used the borrowed sentence as the first line of their story often failed to integrate the sentence fully. So, in most cases, those entries didn’t use their choices to their best advantage…with a few exceptions. Still, it was a complex writing assignment and most were success in writing very sexy lines, even if they weren’t complete stories.
My favorites (and my votes, in bold) were as follows this round: 79, 45, 8, 69, 16 80, 16, 70, 62, 18, 21, 26, 2, 49, 32, 6
Concluding the Second Round
Mixing horror and eroticism might have been a hard sell for this crowd. Still, I’m very happy with the entry I wrote and feel positive about my place in the final standings after Round 2.
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►► Round 3 writing ends MARCH 25 and voting begins on MARCH 29. ◄◄
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