Writing as a Smut Marathoner – Round 4

It’s time to share the results of Round 4 of the 2020 Smut Marathon. Below you’ll find a few details and insights about that round’s assignment as well as dates for the next round.

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Now that Round 5 is in progress, read on to see what I wrote and how I fared for Round 4…or click the link(s) below to read my entries for past rounds.

►► Previous entries: Round 1 | Round 2 | Round 3 | Round 4


Round 4 Assignment – A Story Featuring Dancing

For the fourth round of the Smut Marathon, writers were asked to draft an erotic story comprised of 275 to 325 words, but that also featured dancing.

My entry for this round was listed as #45 and is shown below:

Tera-Bitten Tango

Dex hates not having control. Still, he sets his sync-ware to scan for Tera’s signal — her siren’s song.

Come to me. I’ll take care of you. Protect you…*

Her words resonate across a pirated frequency, flooding his biosensors with erotic, electrical impulses that harden his cock. His biomechatronic legs set out in search of her, traversing backstreets awash with neon. Sector loudspeakers blare curfew warnings as if fighting for sensory dominance over the scent of decay and prevalence of dejection. But, hell if he’s stopping.

Stepping inside the club, the music hits him like a wave. It blasts him back then pulls him towards the empty seat at the front of the stage. Tera’s dancing now, her cybernetic limbs cutting gracefully through sound and space like scissors as she moves in time with the binaural beat.

The smell of her, sweet and pungent, fills the air as she thrusts her naked sex towards the patrons. She wears a crotchless bodysuit to entice the crowd. His cum has stained the shiny latex numerous times, but he doesn’t need such gimmicks. Just the wet, whirring sounds from her vaginal conduit is enough to make him desperate. He pulls his erection free of his standard-issue uniform and begins to stroke its length.

I’ll catch you. Destroy all that is keeping you back. And then I’ll nurse you…

He ignores those laughing at his eagerness. Soon, their humor becomes disbelief when she carefully lowers herself from the stage to straddle his hips. With Tera impaled upon him, he grinds in a frenzy until she takes control and sets the tempo. Resting her forehead on his, she closes the circuit — connecting flesh, bone, and electronics.

Dex knows she’s exploiting a software glitch, accessing the fuck out of his hard drive until her backdoor upload is complete. But, hell if he’s stopping.

*Italicized lyrics by Bjork Gudmundsdottir | “Come to Me” from the album Debut (1993)

My Thought Process

I wrote several drafts for this round.

At first, I drew a bit of a blank on how I wanted to incorporate dancing into an erotic storyline. Using a stripper or exotic dancing as one of the characters seemed an obvious choice—and likely one many other marathoners would use. But, no ideas are bad when brainstorming. So, I allowed my creative process free reign to see if I might uncover an original angle.

I settled on using a couple of randomly chosen, drastically different songs to act as my inspiration. I ended up creating 2 workable ideas. From there, I drafted about 4 or 5 differing outlines that featured dancing in some manner.

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Though I liked several of my outlines, all but two required more words than the allotted word count requirement to tell the story to my satisfaction. I tweaked the two workable outlines, making one a crime/horror story (just for the hell of it) and taking the other into a more dystopian/cyberpunk direction.

Never having attempted a cyberpunk story, I decided to develop that storyline in a third-person/present POV.

To get the right ‘feel’ for that story, I had to research a bit of cybernetics and computer terminology to ensure the story reflected the genre. I enjoy speculative fiction, so it wasn’t too foreign a concept for me. Still the resulting story, about two cyborg characters, had to come off as authentic…and sexy too. So, the extra bit of research actually helped with that.

I had fun with this story and will definitely slate it for one to be re-written and developed to be a 3K-7K word short story at a later date.

My Round 4 Results

I scored 4 points over all—with 3 points coming from the public vote and 1 point from the jury. My entry moved me up one place from the last round, being as I ended up with 7 actual public votes this time. As a result, I’ve moved up from position 23 to 22 in the overall standings.

As always, I tend to get a range of comments and feedback from readers. Below are a few of the comments I received…in no particular order:

“A different take on the lap dancing theme that a few other stories ran with and all the better for it. The imagination of the descriptions was great, and I’m a fan of sci-fi. But it didn’t quite work for me as an erotic piece.”

“This is so far outside my interests and comfort zone that I’m not sure I can give meaningful feedback on it. I appreciated some of the artful alliteration and I did like the ending, with its echo of his earlier determination/thrall, but I have no idea whether a whirring vaginal conduit is erotic in this genre.”

“45- Wow! This was fun and unique and sexy! I really enjoyed this little sex adventure!”

“I laughed at “standard issued” but really loved the “completing the circuit” line. It felt poetic but had payoff in the final few lines. I didn’t immediately like that they just get to sex so easily… but the weird sci-fi scene debased me enough to wonder if this isn’t so abnormal. Respect for going out there with so few words and still trying to engage with potentially boring techno jargon. You handled this task well! My imagination and curiosity is engaged. I’d like to read more!”

45) A novel story. Powerful impressions of lust and satisfaction in a futuristic setting – I was fascinated and hooked.

“I love the dystopian, yet futuristic feel of this story, and the connection they have. I smiled at his ‘hard disk’ and her ‘backdoor’.”

“45.Tera-Bitten Tango */ Star: It’s an intriguing setting. / Star: Unique synopsis. / Wish: I wish I knew more about these characters.”

General Overview of the Field

Overall, I was quite impressed with everyone’s efforts. Sure, there were several that had similar portrayals of ‘dancing’, which resulted in many entries blending together as opposed to standing apart. Still, the technical aspects of writing this round were quite sound. And everyone used the ‘dance’ theme in a way that fulfilled the assignment requirements.

Each voting round, I remain mindful that entries will reflect varying degrees of experience and writers who are in varying stages of their writing journey.

I know that every participant is writing the best they can and try not to have unrealistic expectations that every story will be on par with that of my favorite best-selling writer or within the genre of my choice.

So, dancing wasn’t such an inspirational theme for this group as a whole. (It certainly wasn’t for me.) Oh well. I still appreciated the effort put forth by everyone…regardless if the entry was ‘obvious’ in its use of the prompt, wasn’t overly erotic, or tended to be more of a ‘scene’ than complete story.

It’s hard to come up with original ideas under pressure, especially if it’s not something one is use to doing. Yet, stories were submitted. Kudos to those who did!

Getting any words down at all—especially in a coherent manner and with such few words to work with—is a feat in and of itself…whether writing in a competition or not. I applaud everyone who was able to get an entry written, edited, completed and submitted by the deadline.

Without entries, there would be no stories to read…nor to judge. So, while others might feel a sense of disappointment in the offerings this round, I sincerely appreciate the hard work behind each entry.

To those needing encouragement…keep your head up and be proud of what you’ve accomplished.

To those who have left the marathon—for whatever reason—your writing journey doesn’t have to stop there. PLEASE KEEP WRITING!

My favorites (and my votes, in bold) were as follows this round: 42, 27, 24, 2, 49, 6, 17, 26, 32, 52, 3, 4

Concluding the Fourth Round

Writing cyberpunk was fun. I’ll definitely be doing more writing within that genre in the future (not necessarily as a part of the marathon). As far as the dancing theme was concerned, I’m not likely to include that as a central part of any future erotic works. But, one never knows.

In any event, I qualified to move on to the next round. So, I’m looking forward to the next assignment.

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Round 5 writing ends MAY 27 and voting begins on MAY 31. ◄◄

— All writing and fiction © 2020 Beatrix_B | The Pink Seam —


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Writing as a Smut Marathoner – Round 3

Round 3 of the 2020 Smut Marathon has now closed. Below you’ll find a few details and insights about that round’s assignment as well as dates for the next round.

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The Smut Marathon has moved onward with Round 4. So, it is now safe to share a bit about the third writing assignment as well as some background into the entry I submitted.

Read on to see what I wrote and how I fared for Round 3…or click the link(s) below to read my entries for past rounds.

►► Previous entries: Round 1 | Round 2 | Round 3


Round 3 Assignment – Watched Masturbation

For Round 3, writers were asked to depict a character masturbating while being watched and write about what the voyeur sees…all within the word count of 225 to 250 words.

My entry for this assignment was listed as #22 on the during the voting process and is shown below:

22) My Wish, Your Command

“We’re live in 60 seconds. Do you want the fucking job or not?” Genie’s tone is harsh, impatient. My cock hardens instantly, and she notices. “So, you’re one of those.” She smirks, then scowls. “Go get in position!”

I hurry, my arousal surging as I find my mark. My downward view is obscured by the raging hard-on jutting from my pelvis. However, on the widescreen before me, I watch pre-cum pool at the tip.

“Alright, fuckboy! Start jerking in…five…four…three…” My hand grabs my erection and begins pumping.

Genie’s red-lacquered nails type furiously, confirming the live broadcast. Lewd comments flood the widescreen, but I search only for those by KinkGenie23:

>That dick’s so fucking hard.

>Holy shit…it’s already leaking!

My grip tightens. Pre-cum drips while I imagine crimson-tipped fingers stroking me hard. A drawn-out moan escapes my bared teeth.

>I’m getting so wet watching you!

Viscous sounds draw my attention back to Genie, who is frenziedly fingering her pussy while watching me on her monitor. Everything fades as I focus on her glistening fingers slapping against her slippery sex as she watches my darkening glans play peek-a-boo on her monitor. My lower abdomen tenses with a telltale ache of urgency as she screams her release and grinds upon her palm, sending me over the edge too.

Afterwards, I’m amazed by my luck. Not many broke college students think to answer a sex ad and get paid to have their kinkiest wish granted by a Genie.


(Word count = 249) 

My Thought Process

First off, I noticed the wording of this assignment was more open-ended compared to previous assignments. The exact wording of the assignment read:

Your character is masturbating and someone is watching them.
Write about what the voyeur sees.

I assume the vague wording was done on purpose, to allow for more creativity in how one approached the writing task. However, it meant there was a lot more to consider in terms of the storyline I’d go with as well as the perspective from which I’d best write my story—did I want to write from the vantage of the one SM-Calendar_Mar2020amasturbating (while describing what the voyeur is seeing) or from the vantage of the voyeur watching someone masturbate. The more I thought about it, the more I complicated things, I think. But, I really wanted to create something different and unexpected.

I ended up deciding to do a bit of both options, thinking it would be more interesting to write a scenario where both parties were each exhibitionist and voyeur. So, I went with a story from the perspective of a broke college student who accepts a gig requiring him to masturbate on a live stream.

I began writing the day I received the new assignment and had a draft ready for edit a few hours later. However, as the first story idea I had was a bit ‘iffy’ in regards to the rules–specifically, it didn’t clearly depict the masturbatory act from a voyeur’s vantage, I decided to take a second stab at it, which resulted in the entry I submitted (above).

I thought it would be a cool idea to have my main character narrate the details of his own masturbatory act, but also see his actions projected on the widescreen before him. Yet, in the event that wasn’t quite what the rules entailed, I made sure to include the texted comments of his voyeur, as well.

Still, just to be sure I covered my bases in ‘describing what the voyeur sees’, I depicted my main character’s description of what he saw when as his voyeur began to masturbate as well. However, this ‘turnabout’ ended up not appealing to many of the readers.

‘Not so Mixed’ Reviews this Time

This round, I only scored 2 points overall—earning 1 points from the public vote and 1 point from the jury. Unfortunately, my story’s poor reception resulted in my dropping down from 18 to 23 in the overall standings.

A few of the comments my entry received were:

“This was not sexy in my opinion. The language used was not sensual and the inclusion of the voyeur masturbating too ruined it for me.”

“Best line: “My lower abdomen tenses with a telltale ache of urgency…”
I like a twist ending, but this one seemed a little contrived, as though the story started with an ending. The rest of the story seems equally contrived—I didn’t understand what the job was—and while the descriptions are competently written it’s just not my kink. That means the author would have had to work harder to connect me to the characters, and I didn’t connect at all. “

“(7, 16, 17, 22, 41) These stories had promise but their writers would have benefitted from a slightly higher wordcount. “

Then, there was one blessed soul who left a positive comment:

“22- I really liked this one! It was fun and had a couple layers of voyeurism. I love how you brought it all together at the end, too!”

Considering many didn’t mention my story in their list of favorites or contenders, I think  it’s safe to say that my story missed the mark with many of the readers this round—an unlucky result…as I actually had lot of fun writing it.

General Overview of the Field

There was a lot of strong writing this round. Again, I think everyone got the gist of the assignment and wrote a solid tale depicting masturbation and voyeurism to some extent. There seemed to be several stories that involved dual masturbation/voyeurism, with which I obviously didn’t have a problem (Since I did the same.) I also liked that there were more entries that explored either first-person or third-person present tense.

Still, this wasn’t a very easy writing task to take on, so kudos to all the writers who stuck it out and managed to produce their version of the assignment.

My votes for this round were as follows: 23, 26, 33, and 9.

Concluding the Third Round

What can I say… Sometimes, I win some. Sometimes, I lose some. But, I always live to write another day…and for April, I also live to write for two additional month-long writing challenges and a 4K erotic Sci-Fi manuscript to be completed by May 1. I don’t have time to dwell on a story I wrote weeks ago.

So, on to the next assignment.

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Round 4 writing ends APRIL 22 and voting begins on APRIL 26. ◄◄

— All writing and fiction © 2020 Beatrix_B | The Pink Seam —


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Writing as a Smut Marathoner – Round 2

Round 2 of the 2020 Smut Marathon has now closed. Below you’ll find a few details and insights about that round’s assignment as well as dates for the next round.

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The Smut Marathon has moved onward with Round 3. So, it is now safe to share a bit about the second writing assignment as well as some background into the entry I submitted.

Read on to see what I wrote and how I fared for Round 2…or click the link(s) below to read my entries for past rounds.

►► Previous entries: Round 1 | Round 2 | Round 3


Round 2 Assignment – Borrowing a Sentence

For the second round of the Smut Marathon, writers were asked to draft an erotic story comprised of 100 to 125 words, but which also included one sentence from the previous round—an entry written by another Smut Marathoner.

My entry for this round was listed as #39 during voting and is shown below:

39) Predator and Prey
Despite your firm grasp around my throat, I shake as your rough thrusts impale me. I’m sure you mistake my growing tremors for resistance—predators often do. However, my endless appetite for male flesh isn’t characteristic of prey.

Your pre-cum coats my tongue from moments before, giving me a contact high that intensifies the twitching in earnest. You grunt as my pussy tightens, convulsing around yet another erection in faded denim behind a seedy, backwoods bar.

Avoiding your gaze, I feel your breath graze my lips with an unspoken, hunted hunger* that ignites my own. When you come, I reveal gleaming eyes and an unhinged jaw before pouncing with such voracity that your hindbrain doesn’t process the threat…only that certain death has come.

*Blue text = Borrowed sentence from Johnny Jackhammer’s (36) Discreet Dancing

My Thought Process

The way I approached this assignment was to randomly pick out 5 or 6 sentences from Round 1 that were fairly generic, but that also didn’t show overuse of alliteration (considering I preferred not to use those that resembled tongue-twisters).

Of the few sentences I singled out, I narrowed down the choices to those that I could add to or manipulate without changing the original sentence. The sentence written by Johnny Jackhammer’s (36) ‘Discreet Dancing’, lent itself well for that purpose. Then I set about thinking how I could change the ‘tone’ of the sentence.SM-Calendar_Mar2020a

I opted to go with a darker, horror-like form of eroticism for my entry this round for a few reasons. First, I was inspired by the ‘hunted hunger’ implicit in the borrowed sentence I chose. Second, I was counting on the fact that there wouldn’t be a lot of writers who would elect to pen lines that fit within the fantasy/horror genre. So, I’d have a better chance of having a memorable story that would stand out amidst the other 86 entries. Finally, in choosing the sentence I did, I could take advantage of the 1st-person/2nd-person POV, which lent itself well to the kind of visceral story I wanted to write.

In the end, I settled on the story idea that gave the impression that the main character was the ‘prey’ in an aggressive sexual interaction with a predator. Then gradually revealed that it was she who was, in fact the predator in the scenario. I added a few words onto the end of the borrowed sentence to serve as a foil to the ‘hunted/hungry’ feelings my main character would also feel as she transformed from presumed prey to predator.

Getting Mixed Reviews…Again

This round, I managed to score 6 more points overall—earning 5 points from the public vote and 1 point from the jury. I was happy to see my entry got 9 actual votes from the public this time, which improved my overall ranking and moved me up from the 21st position to 18th in the overall standings.

Still, I think it’s safe to say that there were those who were not fans of my combining horror within my erotic tale. A few readers who didn’t enjoy the horror direction my entry took said:

“For me, there’s a bit too roughness and it almost feels like horror, especially with the ending, which is great, but didn’t suit my taste for this round.”

” I find it hard to be turned on by fantasies that involve blood and death!”

“Yikes!”

However, there were also those who were more favorable of my decisions to mix things up a bit. Here are a few positive comments my entry received:

“Very interesting! I love how you twisted this sentence into a horror micro story!”

“This is a full story, well written from beginning to end.”

“…I get the distinct sense of something supernatural at play here. And I like the idea of the prey being the predator. I’m iffy on the 2nd person narrator…it does create a more active and feeling of audience involvement.”

As is always the case, voting really boiled down to each individual reader’s taste in erotica. Still, I had a lot more fun writing a story that went against the grain than with it. So, no regrets.

General Overview of the Field

Overall, I thought most entries effectively integrated their chosen borrowed sentences into their erotic micro stories. However, there were a lot of entries that, in my opinion, didn’t really create complete stories. Instead, many wrote erotic scenes that didn’t include a beginning, middle, and an end. Still, in most cases, the writing was very erotic otherwise.

A few things I did note, stories that used some of the more popular sentences from Round 1 ended up sounding very similar. As a result, some of those stories didn’t stand apart enough amidst the other entries, and therefore didn’t make my short-list of favorites.

Another commonality I found was that many of the entries that used the borrowed sentence as the first line of their story often failed to integrate the sentence fully.  So, in most cases, those entries didn’t use their choices to their best advantage…with a few exceptions. Still, it was a complex writing assignment and most were success in writing very sexy lines, even if they weren’t complete stories.

My favorites (and my votes, in bold) were as follows this round: 79, 45, 8, 69, 16 80, 16, 70, 62, 18, 21, 26, 2, 49, 32, 6

Concluding the Second Round

Mixing horror and eroticism might have been a hard sell for this crowd. Still, I’m very happy with the entry I wrote and feel positive about my place in the final standings after Round 2.

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Round 3 writing ends MARCH 25 and voting begins on MARCH 29. ◄◄

— All writing and fiction © 2020 Beatrix_B | The Pink Seam —


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Writing as a Smut Marathoner – Round 1

In January, I signed on to be one of 100+ erotica writers to write their ‘pants off’ for the 2020 cycle of a juried, long-running, writing competition called Smut Marathon. Now that Round 1 has closed, below you’ll find a few details and insights about the previous assignment.

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The 2020 Smut Marathon is well underway, having now progressed to Round 2. So, I decided to share a bit about the first writing assignment as well as some background into the entry I submitted.

Read on to see what I wrote and how I fared for Round 1…or click the links below to read my entries for the rounds that followed.

►► Next entry: Round 2 (awaiting results to activate link)


 Round 1 Assignment – Alliteration

For the first round of the Smut Marathon, writers were asked to draft an erotic sentence comprised of 15 to 25 words that also demonstrated examples of alliteration.

My entry for this assignment was listed as #8 on the during the voting process and is shown below:

Rhetorical Release
A blindfolded Lady Justice savored the lawyer’s linguistic guile, eliciting the aural orgasm that tipped her scales enough to get his guilty defendant off too.

My Thought Process

For this assignment, I chose to use alliteration to draw attention to the word pairs lawyer’s/linguistic and aural/orgasm (the latter being an example of phonetic alliteration). Earlier drafts of my sentence had larger groupings of alliteration. However, I didn’t like the tongue-twister-like effect that resulted. Therefore, I decided to err on the side of storytelling instead…by evoking an image of blind Justice being seduced by a slick-talking lawyer.SM-Calendar_Feb2020-2

I was aware that the sentence wouldn’t come off as smutty as it could have. But, I was hoping the story’s visual would ‘sell the sexy’ as opposed to explicit erotic wording—-which was definitely a risk.

I wasn’t overly surprised that many didn’t agree with my creative choices. Still, I was quite happy with the originality of the idea as well as the ‘double meaning’ ending, which I thought was smart and had its own erotic aspects, albeit subtle ones.

Getting Mixed Reviews

Though my entry wasn’t as well received as I’d hoped, I was happy to see that I did get a few points this round as well as a few favorable comments from a couple of the judges who were able to connect with my story idea and ‘play on words’ :

“#8 Rhetorical Release – The Lady Justice reference is both proper and hot here with the added allusion of the blindfold she wears without having to state it.” (2 points)

“Rhetorical Release The very smart word play here is hugely enjoyable. Like a bonne bouche. The ‘lawyer’s linguistic guile,’ is a memorable phrase. A delightful double entendre. No wonder his clients are getting off.” (6 points)

Was it the right choice to not go overly smutty? Perhaps not, according to the readers. However, I liked the finished product…and thankfully, there were a couple judges that liked the entry, too.

General Overview of the Field

Overall, I think everyone understood the challenge. There were just several entries that took alliteration to an extreme level, creating sentences that resembled tongue twisters. However, I understand how it might be hard to discern how literal to be when it comes to an assignment such as this…particularly when you only have 25 words with which to work.

Unfortunately, I didn’t keep the notes that indicated the other four picks I voted for in this round—the fifth vote being my own, of course. But, I’ll be sure to review and note the entries I vote for in the second round.

Concluding the First Round

It’s clear why my subtle choices for the first assignment landed me in the middle of the pack. The majority of readers and judges seemed to favor the entries that fulfilled 3 important aspects: (1) followed the challenge guidelines, (2) demonstrated a significant degree of eroticism, and (3) submitted an entry memorable enough to stand out within a field of over 100 entries.

I believe I definitely made the necessary adjustments for the next assignment and made sure those aspects of the challenge were covered in my entry for Round 2. Next week, I’ll find out if I was, indeed, successful in hitting the mark. Until then…stay tuned.

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Voting ends MARCH 6 and results will be posted on MARCH 8. ◄◄

— All writing and fiction © 2020 Beatrix_B | The Pink Seam —


VOTING IS NOW CLOSED for Round 2!


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